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Finding Obscurity The Secrets Series Book 1 eBook Emma Shade

**SPOILERS**

First of all, I got this book as a free download and decided to read it because it had good reviews. The premise of the story is pretty solid; it has good potential but was painful to read because of the glaring grammatical errors throughout. I found myself having to stop repeatedly to figure out what the author meant, vs. what was actually written because of omitted words, changes in tense and just plain clumsy word choices (everything is "grabbed" in this story--glasses of wine, people's hands, receipts, etc., people run "full bore" more than once, several barks of laughter...to many phrases on repeat). The dialogue is awkward; too formal in some places and not formal enough in others.

There are a LOT of cliches in this story, from the absolute perfection of the characters' appearances to the MC being a virgin. People with average jobs live in 'upper pay scale" apartments and drive expensive sports cars. Two gorgeous men with six-pack abs seem to fall in love with the MC on sight, no matter how rude or ridiculously she behaves. Lily is constantly making stupid decisions with her safety (sneaking out to get away from those protecting her, leaving the safety of a public store when she fears she is being followed/stalked without mentioning it to anyone). Also, the amount of red and black in the decor and clothing in this story is so prevalent, I was beginning to think they had some sort of significance to the story line.

The author of this story seems to have written this when she was very young and inexperienced, and appears to depend on what her imagination of grand parties and elite social gatherings might be like. It read like fan fiction, to be honest, of a fandom that doesn't exist. I cringed at the main character's boorish behavior at a private exhibit whist on a first date with a man she barely knew. He had explained that the hosts were good friends and that it was an important event, and she made out with her date on the dance floor, stuffed her face inelegantly and consumed 10 glasses of wine before passing out drunk. Despite that, everyone seems to think she's charming, and she becomes cozy BFFs with the party's hostess. Despite living or ten years in relative introversion with no friends and little social contact, she tells three people about her special gifts within a week of meeting them. She is physically attracted to two men who hate each other, and despite being a virgin and not dating since high school, has sex with one of them making out with the other the previous day--without a condom.

There is far too much emphasis on inconsequential details like the style of clothing worn or the music artist or song playing or type of car being driven (she doesn't just get in her car, she jumps into her BMW), and not enough on other, more important details that make the story seem kind of empty. Too many contradictions in words, action and narrative to take Lily seriously, or even care about her very much. She comes off as immature, whiny and annoying too often to believe she's a 28 year old educated woman with a lucrative career.

All in all, I just kept stumbling over the clumsy writing. I understand that this was the author's first novel, so she may have gained some polish and experience along the way. However, when offering the first book in a series for free, you should definitely make sure that it is edited and proofread meticulously first to try to entice a reader to buy and read future installments. I can understand that when an author is new, she might not be able to afford to have a professional help, but at least have more than one or two beta readers before publishing. She should definitely go back and fix this book to save herself some lost future readers who can't get past the writing to enjoy what the other stories might have to offer.

I know that this a LOT of criticism, but after the first half of the book, I started my review so I could keep up with the thoughts running through my head at the time. That being said, the story itself isn't bad. The ideas of the characters have great potential and the plot line itself flows well enough without completely stalling out at any one point. I was interested enough in where the story was going to keep reading, even while I cringed at misused words and strange turns of phrase. There is enough mystery in who can and cannot be trusted and how many sides there even are in the overall plot to keep the reader guessing and interested in spite of its faults. The cliffhanger at the end piqued my curiosity, though perhaps not enough to purchase the second book in the series, if it means enduring such writing again. I will check out the reviews to see what others have to say about the quality of the whole thing before I make a final decision.


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Finding Obscurity The Secrets Series Book 1 eBook Emma Shade Reviews

The story could have been interesting, but none of the characters were relatable. I felt nothing for any of them. The main character is supposed to be 28 but sounds like a whiney teenager from a cheap YA romance. The story might have been better if the author had written her as a younger character. Things just progressed quickly with her relationships with people that didn't make any sense - she didn't have any friends for 10 years and then all of a sudden she's besties with tons of people. *Spoiler* she goes out on one date with a guy she just met (and ran away from) and then when he comes over one day later she feels it's a perfect time to lose her virginity - AT 28. She waits all that time just to hook up with some random guy, after making out with a different guy (obviously it HAD to be the first guy's friend) the night before. Just a very dull read altogether.
Well-written paranormal story in which a young woman, Lily, starts to create a social life ten years after her younger sister is killed in a car accident where Lily was driving the vehicle. On that day, Lily learned she was adopted and that the mother she always considered her biological parent wished she'd never been brought into the family--and, at the funeral, the family isolated Lily, not allowing her to sit with them to mourn the 15-year-old sister that had meant so much to Lily.

Lily has always known she had abilities that others didn't, including dreaming about events before they happen and sometimes knowing where misplaced or lost items can be found. In this book, she learns more about the origin of those abilities as she meets with others who also have abilities that most people do not. With the help of her best friend, Sam, Lily enters an exclusive nightclub with the intention of possibly getting to know a woman with out-of-the ordinary abilities, and she leaves being chased out by Ashton, the owner and a man without the normal "vibrations" that Lily feels around others. Unlike the absence of such vibrations, another man, Blake, seems to exude electrical power whenever they touch. Both Ashton and Blake know things that could possibly explain Lily's abilities, and throughout the story, she learns more about herself, her family, her friends and her enemies--including that there are some people she considers friends who should be considered enemies, and there are some enemies who should be considered friends.

Part of a series, the book is not complete in itself, though it does provide resolution to many of the issues generated at the start of the book while creating new curiosities that will need to wait for future volumes to resolve. While the writing is good, there are several instances of missing words or type-o's that are very evident in the edition, concerns that a good editor should have caught. The book is well written, though it seems that some of the more romantic passages are written more to include those actions for the marketing purposes rather than for furthering the story; perhaps, though, further installments in the series will explain the purpose of some of these actions that seem somehow not in keeping with this particular segment of the story. One will have to read more of the stories to perhaps best understand all the events in this particular novel, though reading just this book will allow one to have a story complete enough to be content, if not completely satisfied with the cliffhanger conclusion since it will leave the reader wanting to know more about all the characters involved in Lily's newly-discovered life and friendships.

"Finding Obscurity" is recommended for those seeking to escape reality and use one's imagination to consider other-worldly possibilities, particularly young adults and those young-at-heart readers who want to believe anything is possible.
**SPOILERS**

First of all, I got this book as a free download and decided to read it because it had good reviews. The premise of the story is pretty solid; it has good potential but was painful to read because of the glaring grammatical errors throughout. I found myself having to stop repeatedly to figure out what the author meant, vs. what was actually written because of omitted words, changes in tense and just plain clumsy word choices (everything is "grabbed" in this story--glasses of wine, people's hands, receipts, etc., people run "full bore" more than once, several barks of laughter...to many phrases on repeat). The dialogue is awkward; too formal in some places and not formal enough in others.

There are a LOT of cliches in this story, from the absolute perfection of the characters' appearances to the MC being a virgin. People with average jobs live in 'upper pay scale" apartments and drive expensive sports cars. Two gorgeous men with six-pack abs seem to fall in love with the MC on sight, no matter how rude or ridiculously she behaves. Lily is constantly making stupid decisions with her safety (sneaking out to get away from those protecting her, leaving the safety of a public store when she fears she is being followed/stalked without mentioning it to anyone). Also, the amount of red and black in the decor and clothing in this story is so prevalent, I was beginning to think they had some sort of significance to the story line.

The author of this story seems to have written this when she was very young and inexperienced, and appears to depend on what her imagination of grand parties and elite social gatherings might be like. It read like fan fiction, to be honest, of a fandom that doesn't exist. I cringed at the main character's boorish behavior at a private exhibit whist on a first date with a man she barely knew. He had explained that the hosts were good friends and that it was an important event, and she made out with her date on the dance floor, stuffed her face inelegantly and consumed 10 glasses of wine before passing out drunk. Despite that, everyone seems to think she's charming, and she becomes cozy BFFs with the party's hostess. Despite living or ten years in relative introversion with no friends and little social contact, she tells three people about her special gifts within a week of meeting them. She is physically attracted to two men who hate each other, and despite being a virgin and not dating since high school, has sex with one of them making out with the other the previous day--without a condom.

There is far too much emphasis on inconsequential details like the style of clothing worn or the music artist or song playing or type of car being driven (she doesn't just get in her car, she jumps into her BMW), and not enough on other, more important details that make the story seem kind of empty. Too many contradictions in words, action and narrative to take Lily seriously, or even care about her very much. She comes off as immature, whiny and annoying too often to believe she's a 28 year old educated woman with a lucrative career.

All in all, I just kept stumbling over the clumsy writing. I understand that this was the author's first novel, so she may have gained some polish and experience along the way. However, when offering the first book in a series for free, you should definitely make sure that it is edited and proofread meticulously first to try to entice a reader to buy and read future installments. I can understand that when an author is new, she might not be able to afford to have a professional help, but at least have more than one or two beta readers before publishing. She should definitely go back and fix this book to save herself some lost future readers who can't get past the writing to enjoy what the other stories might have to offer.

I know that this a LOT of criticism, but after the first half of the book, I started my review so I could keep up with the thoughts running through my head at the time. That being said, the story itself isn't bad. The ideas of the characters have great potential and the plot line itself flows well enough without completely stalling out at any one point. I was interested enough in where the story was going to keep reading, even while I cringed at misused words and strange turns of phrase. There is enough mystery in who can and cannot be trusted and how many sides there even are in the overall plot to keep the reader guessing and interested in spite of its faults. The cliffhanger at the end piqued my curiosity, though perhaps not enough to purchase the second book in the series, if it means enduring such writing again. I will check out the reviews to see what others have to say about the quality of the whole thing before I make a final decision.